Come a little closer
I miss us being together
Please don't walk away,
Tell me if you feel the same way
Remember those words we exchanged
So sweet and loving
I wish you didn't change
And didn't leave me here hanging
Tell me if you still love me
Tell me if I still have a place
The structure of this is wonderful. Very interesting ending on two lines after two stanzas of five. Really gives some character to the importance of the last lines.
ReplyDeletethank you for the compliment dear. ^^,
ReplyDeleteWelcome to Room for Romance.. This is truly romantic and I wish him to have the same place in her heart.. I will consider this for Romantic Room as well..
ReplyDelete--Someone Is Special--
ah poetic heartache - beautiful and tragic
ReplyDeleteI think that love is like matter...it cannot be destroyed it merely changes form, but it is sad when it changes for one and not the other. Peace be with you.
ReplyDeleteAh, that's really cute, and quite moving!
ReplyDelete'still have a place' is just right.
so romantic,
ReplyDeleteI thought I already commented here.
awesome entry.
http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/11/20/the-perfect-poet-award-4-poets-rally-week-33/
ReplyDeleteweek 33 perfect poet award notice,
Happy Saturday!
If you wish to accept, attach a poem, enter for week 33..
you can do it later if too busy.
Thanks for the support.
tnk u jingle ;)
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