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Wednesday, November 3, 2010

Poetry #10: Love Still


Come a little closer
I miss us being together
Please don't walk away,
Tell me if you feel the same way

Remember those words we exchanged
So sweet and loving
I wish you didn't change
And didn't leave me here hanging

Tell me if you still love me
Tell me if I still have a place
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9 comments:

  1. The structure of this is wonderful. Very interesting ending on two lines after two stanzas of five. Really gives some character to the importance of the last lines.

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  2. thank you for the compliment dear. ^^,

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  3. Welcome to Room for Romance.. This is truly romantic and I wish him to have the same place in her heart.. I will consider this for Romantic Room as well..

    --Someone Is Special--

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  4. ah poetic heartache - beautiful and tragic

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  5. I think that love is like matter...it cannot be destroyed it merely changes form, but it is sad when it changes for one and not the other. Peace be with you.

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  6. Ah, that's really cute, and quite moving!
    'still have a place' is just right.

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  7. so romantic,
    I thought I already commented here.
    awesome entry.

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  8. http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/11/20/the-perfect-poet-award-4-poets-rally-week-33/

    week 33 perfect poet award notice,
    Happy Saturday!
    If you wish to accept, attach a poem, enter for week 33..
    you can do it later if too busy.
    Thanks for the support.

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Thank you for sharing your time with me(^^,)